How's My Driving/Constructive Crit?

So, this is a HMD/Concrit post for Blues from Archie's Mega Man comic series. Advice on how to do it better or pointers etc. is fully welcomed. Also, feel free to use this as an Opt-Out as well.

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CR for destinystrings

( Oh hey... people. )